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| breakdown in the waiting ro... 2004-03-28 ch 1,   | This is good. I love poems that tell stories in this way. . .like the repitition. -Jessica |
| VampiricSacrifice 2003-08-03 ch 1, | i like this poem a lot because it describes me very well. i like how you used the same lines over - it kept it interesting. anyways, this is definetly my favorite story |
| Yaquel Visain 2003-07-29 ch 1, | "Clutching my cure I tightly lock the door" Now, that's Linkin Park. Chester is so pretty. *giggles* |
| kep 2003-07-20 ch 1, | Wow, again this is a good piece. The order of the stanzas and description of the situation is well done, and again the language used is great. good job. |
| Grendel 2003-07-17 ch 1, | wow! awsome! you know what they say when you play with fire... |
| Krikoris 2003-07-10 ch 1, | That was really really good! I don't know why you wouldnt like it, although I never like what I write just because I wrote it lol. Yes, anyway, I loved how I could picture it in my head. Truly beautiful! Krikoris |
| Kerbi 2003-07-07 ch 1, | well, i liked it. it really reminded me of a linkin park song, but i cant remember which one, and i'm too damn exhausted to go look it up, lol |
| Angerona 2003-07-06 ch 1, | ah yes here is what i was looking for when i came here! this is great. Really really great i play with fire my self...yeah that whast all the band aids are for... any way i like the part inbtween each stansa; Sick of the Tension Sick of the hunger I think thats from a song...yeah any way good work good work. i like the burning paper description, really great. :D ~Angerona the Goddess of Death~ me: Smoking...one of the only two things that stay constent in my life. Claire: whast the other thing. Me: The TV and the line up changes every night... |
| Imoen 2003-07-03 ch 1, | Some of the best work that I've ever written was when I was really tired or angry. It appears that the same goes for you too. I liked this alot, the imagery in it was amazing. |
| Pound 2003-05-30 ch 1, | well done. easy to visualize. i thoroughly enjoyed the thoughts of cutting and fire. calming and triggering all at once. having quit cutting and started subconciously picking my skin until it bleeds, its good to read a wholesome poem about si, fire, cigarettes, pills... *cackles* all very calming things. i liked how "sick of the tension, sick of the hunger" was repeated through out. was that a subconcious-linkin-park-fan movement or did you write it on purpose? keep writting, peace -alfy the un-hero |
| Fractured Dreams 2003-05-28 ch 1, | Um...wow? I'm really impressed. I like the repitition, it really adds a lot of rhythm and unity. It flows very well, and it doesn't go on at a pathetically slow pace to draw out the events, which for this is good. Very short and sweet. (Bad Kai! No clichés! Clichés are bad! *sheepish grin*) So I'll have to read some more of your poetry when I get the chance. ~Fracture |
| ionlyliveindreams 2003-05-28 ch 1, | Woah. I like this, too. Your poetry rocks! Anyways, I really like this. I'm completely pyro. I'm mean the only thing I can draw well is flames. Oh! You know what's fun? Getting a bottle of hairspray and a lighter and spraying hairspray into the flame. It's so cool... so yeah... *blushes* Anyways, cool poem! Keep writing ~ionlyliveindreams |
| Lux's Confusion 2003-05-28 ch 1, | damn, I swear your my parted twin and your reading my thoughts. god how many times have I had a moment like that? it was like i was living it over again, you know those lonely nights, where the bad stuff calls your name and won't stop. awesome job as usual. i'm jealous. ttly Jasmine |
| Aureya of Chocolate 2003-05-27 ch 1, | very good poem i liked it a lot, i could see the images and everything, and i liked how u used a bit of linkin park lyrics in ur poem, that was good at giving ur reader the initial idea of the mood of the poem sorta thing. get me? no? dont worry :) keep writing lotsa luv jazzo ps thanx for reviewing me pps i like ur penname! jazzo |
| not sure yet 2003-05-24 ch 1, | interesting, i like it though, flows really well, some good imagry, almost more of a song, kinda, anywayz, nicely done, enjoyed it muchly, good job |