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| Shadowgirl 2004-03-15 ch 1,   | Nice! I like the lines "From the beginning / I have been taught to be smart". Very personal point of view throughout which gives it a nice flow. |
| orangefreak33 2003-10-31 ch 1, | I really liked this, though it feels like I'm intruding into what I shouldn't know. The emotions are very clear, good job. |
| ArisaKatsu 2003-06-24 ch 1, | wow. that was great! lots of determination and frustration. very well done. |
| Animagess 2003-05-28 ch 1, | Yeah, we're all pretty screwed up. |
| Artemis Astralstar 2003-05-25 ch 1, | wow, great poem, i feel like i'm tresspassing on all these feelings, well done, i like this poem a lot. |
| Miamouse 2003-05-25 ch 1, | hm, nice. I like that all the questions are in the first verse, not littered through the poem, and it ends happily. Very neat and the meaning is clear. Mia :) |
| coolhead15 2003-05-24 ch 1, | Great poetry! You're really improving on your "speeling errs", so it makes your work more readable. Keep going! ~coolhead15~ |
| Sahrin 2003-05-24 ch 1, | Yay! A poem about personal development that doesn't end sad. It's a great poem...I love the continuity in the monologue... Great work, keep writing. S. |