Reviews for Candyland Loan Sharks

FoxxieFantasy
2003-10-22
ch 1,

lol. lol. candy. comparing friendship to candy...very...original i say. hehehe. but there could be lots of meaning behind all of these words...it sounds like somebody is struggling with their friends? wanting a new start? sounds familiar. nice job there.

Ronin Rabbit
2003-05-25
ch 1,

Cute. I'm sure there's a lot of deepness and possible angst to this poem but truthfully I couldn't get past the sugary metaphors :)

The format needs to be fixed, upload it as an htm file to make it easier to read. I would change one of the 'chewy's to something else - a little reptitive. And it's Count Chocula - not chocalate.

Fun poem, if there is a deeper meaning to it for yourself then I'm sure you'll write more poems like it - minus the sugar of course.

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