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| Louellena 2005-01-10 ch 1,   | "If you can take can unjust abuse from loved ones" - is the second 'can' supposed to be there? Otheriwse, the poem is fine.I've read "If", but only after hearing it read as a main inspiration for a missionary... ~L.E.~ |
| handle187 2003-09-17 ch 1, | Very good, not that angsty type feminism. |
| Gingaman 2003-08-17 ch 1, | hehe, that was really good! good advice as well. it made up my mind about something... anyways, yeh. very nice. (PS - I'm a pesco vegetarian too, i'm sure you really wanted to know that) |
| serasivad 2003-06-29 ch 1, | That was pure woman and I love it! I think you captured the essence of a woman and besides which, the technical side of the poem is very sophisticated. I like the every other line rhyming. |
| Brooke ORiley 2003-06-22 ch 1, | nice, i like that. very good...well, um...lesson? theme? yeah, you get the point. well done! |
| Zainab 2003-06-17 ch 1, | Very good! This is an excellent poem. I like how it flows, and all the advice that's put in there. I esp. like the part about the curry.^^ |
| Mime 2003-06-10 ch 1, | How sweet! I love the last line, even if I haven't read "If" yet! I think this suits fp.net fine; the poem can definatly stand it's own. Good Job! |
| obsidian katana 2003-06-10 ch 1, | great poem! lol, pretty funny, i like this! nice advice :P good job on this. keep on writing! |
| Isay 2003-05-26 ch 1, | Yeah, it captures the feel of Kipling's 'If'... very nice... feminist too... ^_^ ~Isay |
| Glastonbury 2003-05-26 ch 1, | Well written, good job there. I thik you've kept to the rhyming pattern quite nicely myself. Anyway, great piece of work. |
| Sparkly Liz 2003-05-26 ch 1, | I really like this poem. Its an inspiration for everyone. Like the idea of keeping Kipling's rhyming scheme - very original. :o) Well done. Liz. |