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| Arynnl 2003-06-02 ch 1,   | this is a great poem, ryan it gives something, it has a real aura like seeing that one person at the old folk's home who never gets any visitors its old... i really like this poem kudos, anchovy boy! |
| color by number 2003-05-31 ch 1, | wow, this is great! awesome imagery and i really love your vocabulary. very impressive. =) |
| glitterjewele 2003-05-26 ch 1, | magnificent! LOVED the creepy aura i got while reading this. fantastic history, way to bring the scenerio to life! my first impression was actually that this was being told by a corpse, which was very cool. :) there's some truly awesome imagery here. favorite lines n' tidbits were: "slackened jaw is tickled/by the dew dropped grass," "shackling the ruin," "brings a/toothless smile," and "a tear leaks from my broken eye." the broken eye bit in particular caught my attention. very original. simply stunning. loved it muchly! great work! |