slightly violent, I really like the beginning (ya i'm lazy)

bex, you really punched it to us
wonderful. You might want to say what the woman was wearing Like-
"He hardly noticed her for her black attiare" or something like that. Great pictures.

becca, a sari is worn around your body, you are meaning a turban that the lady is wearing

o! 'tis good. i like your style and your way of expressing the plot. your use of short, concise chapters is most interesting. you have good character development and your plot line is excellent. ^ ^ i look forward to reading more.
oh, btw, thanks for your review, every little bit helps.