It's alright down to the last stanza's of the last verse. But it's not bad, I guess.

Hmm, pretty poem. It's sad that you lost her though... it's kinda like hearing a song that you immediately like but never hear it again and you never know the name of it.

*sighs* This is so beautiful!

This poem is really touching. I like the way you titled it. Best Wishes!

I know that feeling. Especially when you look at eachother while you pass. You're like 'jeez is it just me or is he, like, perfect' or whatever and then you pass and it's over. Oh well, I just really like this.

Nizzy

sorta sweet! love at first sight... [don't tell anyone i said that! -just kidding ] keep up the good work!

Interesting. I can almost hear this being put to a tune... It has a nice rhythm to it.

Nire the Evil

Oh how sweet! I like this a lot! Thanks for reviewing my out my first chapter to my story Soul Catcher. Oh also you're from eygpt that is cool. I like eygpt and other asian countries. They rock! My Dad's from Pakistan. Okay down saying irrelvent things. E-mail me at some time. Oh and I REALLY like this selection. I have had these thoughts about some guy on the street before!

Nice concept. Once more, I'd like to suggest laying off the rhyme for a bit. It has a tendency to make your poetry sound like a country song.

Sweet. You have great repitition skills! _ It makes it all the sweeter.

This is so sweet.

It's so cute and stuffs.

I mean, you could relate it to yourself you know?

See a cute guy/girl and you just want to know.

Hmm, pretty good! :)

Keep writing,

Vnomi. ;)