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| Sylvia Ann Elliot 2005-06-23 ch 1,  | abuseWow. This is so vague, and so cool. Definitely going on favorites. I like how you repeated the line, "Blood and fate and night and light and fire". I liked the references to the narrator's family all being an element or two, and then dying in fire. The repetition of the Voices in the narrator's head at the end pulls the poem back together, and the ending is so appropriate! Kudos, kudos, kudos, and keep writing! |
| Escapist 2003-10-18 ch 1, | abuseI immediately like this poem as soon as I started reading it, but then I read, "My love, my heart – he was blood and fire and Fate and night because he was everything that I Needed to draw close to myself because I’m so empty inside and he died. Too." and fell in love with it. By the time I read the last couple of lines I was blown away. This poem is so beautiful in its own way, as everything always is. Truly a commendable job. |
| I am Gone 2003-09-20 ch 1, | abuseOh this is great. I really love how you expressed your self in this. |
| Stormer 2003-06-30 ch 1, | abuseOkay...that was...amazing. *loL* Seriously, wow! Totally disturbing and demented! I love it! :) The way I choose to interpret it is that it isn't based entirely on reality (if it were it'd be too horrible to contemplate!) and that it's about someone who is slightly, um, mentally disturbed. And who did bad, bad things with matches. Anyway...I hope I'm right that it's fictional! *hopes* Great poem either way. |
| Werecat99 2003-06-08 ch 1, | abuseThis is the second time I read this. The first reading left me breathless. I hope I can find the words for a proper review now. It is a bit weird, yes, but it has harmony in it. I enjoyed the play of light and fire. It was very depressing at times, with that poor baby sister and the implied deaths of the rest of the family. The slow descend to insanity was perfect. I really, really liked this. And again, I'm not the sanest person anyway. Thanks for the reviews. |
| Neon Warning Bearer 2003-06-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'm gonna put all your poems, short stories, etc. in a separate book. So that would mean that I promised to make you, 1-kiy, 2-offshoots, and 3-poems and short stories, thank gods that I have two months to do that in. By the way, the poem is very inspiring and very disturbing. Write another soon. Hn. ja ne |
| Toireasa 2003-06-03 ch 1, | abuseMerf? Wow, I'm sort of confused. An interesting piece with a never stopping rhythym. I like this, for the most part. Not your best, but it's not possible for to write something that's not worth reading. Ai yi, good job. ~Toireasa |
| oSsLeR 2003-06-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseAll I can say is WOW. Val Mora, you are the BOMB. |