"." means "..." this right? Well just to tell you my friend showed me a way, to make ... that show up. (So far i know it just works w/ Microsoft Word) If you leave the spaces the same way and keep the ...'s instead of just . then when you save it, save it as a WebPage! and then it all shows up, (Double spaces end up leaving a big chunk out so don't do that) Just a lil bit of advice...

Your story is pretty interesting...advice: add more detail to make it better. it was kinda confusing...

GGrr... Why does death always seem to follow her? And what could be so terrible about her? I really hope I'm not catching a tail from another story. I REALLY hate it when that happens.But I really like what you have so far! Continue, onegai!

Ja ne, Tsuki no Kage-san!

Hm . . . What of the Moon? What's Kage mean?

Wow, 2 reviews in a row. Wat, tat's not the point.

U finally got some enemy...unidentified but still. Banzai, Banzai!! Hopefully, this doesn't become a imatation story. YupYup ^^ {~Peace and Rock on!~}

0(O.O)0 By monkii ((and maybe you want me to upload ur story, then? I don't think i get a whole lot of error changes when my story uploads ^_^ ))

lol the little skits at the end are cute. But the strory is really good! I cant wait to see what happens next! Continue Please!
Liriel

Again, well-written. I just wish I can have it as a book to read it. Just one thing plz: leave spaces for paragraphs after each one talks. Long paragraphs scares me. ^_^

HAHA! i didn't know there was a chapter 2. Oh well like i said earlier, really good, just wondering though why do you put "." what does that mean? is it the same as "..."

You need to fix a lot of grammer and spelling stuff. (Proofread) Otherwise i love it?

You MUST CONTINUE!

what are the swords guardians of?

Very interesting. Ur story is getting very intense. The names kinda remind me of the ex-show "Jack and Jill" where Jack is the girl and Jill is the boy. Just had to say that (Lax=girl, Rain=boy, -.-')

Extremely great! You totally have to write more! I'll go crazy with anticipation! The story could use a tensy little bit of revising, but overall I'm hooked! BTW, plese read my story "The Amulet".
^_^ Thanx!!