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| efphrim 2008-03-24 ch 1,  | abuseI already like this story. |
| i-see-faeries 2007-07-25 ch 42, | abuseWell that was an interesting read. It took me a while, but I did it. LOL. I love it. I really do; I thnk you have a great plot. But I do have constructive criticism though. For one, your characters seem shallowly developed outside their love lives. I realize that it's probably because that's what the story is about, but even so, chracters development is essential for a story to seem alive. Also, you try to create angst for Mikah, I believe, but that seemed kind of weak as well. I don't know. It just seems like a lot of overstating to me. His situation isn't that bad, not any worse than mine or anyone that lives in my town. And the ending seems kind of abrupt. I know ending a story at a sad part with a sort of cliffhanger is popular, but it's still hard to do correctly. Note. I did not say this to be mean. I love your story, I really do. The humor amuses me and the romance makes me smile. And I know it's a little too late to critique, but I though I'd do it anyways. And after all, this story is old. I'm positive you're a whole of a lot better writer now. I do love this, and I'll be reading the sequal soon! |
| Smudgeworthy 2007-06-04 ch 1, | abuseI keep thinking I've reviewed this story (and I may have. If so, forget that last statement, and pretty much this whole thing, 'cause it's likely I've said it before ^.^ I have a really bad memory). At first my favourite character was Mikah, but throughout the story it changed and became Kael. I can't help it - he's so damn cute! I know I'm reviewing for the first chapter, but I've read the whole thing >.< Your writing is amazing! I love the way you describe emotions, and that you don't skip over anything. I'd write more, but I have a tonne of homework, and most of it's due tommorow xD Anyway, this was a great story! Ciao! |
| Scribbles Go On Forever 2007-02-24 ch 41, | abuseWOW! amazing! i am about to go onto Reckless - |
| Kyle's Precious Little Girl 2006-12-14 ch 41, | abuse*grins* It took me like...4 days to read the whole thing, but i finally did it! And i'm so impressed with this story! It was really good! And now i'm going to read reckless! yay Kepp up the great work! ~Kyle's Precious Little Girl |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 41, | abuseOh my God! How could it end like this?!! Well, I must start read Reckless now,because this was to cruel!!:'( But the story is the best!^^ |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 40, | abuseAh! They are so sweet together! Even though Kael is really angsty! But I like that!!^^ |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 39, | abusePoor Kael!!I feel so sorry for him!! But he's still cute, though!^^ |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 38, | abuseSully and Kael are sweet!^^ And the scene with Skylar and Mikah was so cool!^^ Gosh, I wonder if his father get to see him with blue hair!! |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 37, | abuseGosh... Thatwas sweet!!^^ |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 36, | abuseOh, will Sully make up with Kael??^^ Hope so!^^ |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 35, | abuseAhaha! Skylar is just so cool!!^^ |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 34, | abuseHmm... Falling in love with a twin, isn't that kind of falling in love with oneself?:-/ I just come to think of it!!^^ Poor Kael, Sully's an **, but still: poor him to... Did that make sense? Probably not, but well... I loved the scene with Mikah! He love Skylar, but doesn't know it's Skylar!!:p So cute!!^^ |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 33, | abuseChad and Darryl is so sweet!^^ Very nice chapter!!:) |
| Kizuna 2006-08-05 ch 32, | abuseGreat chapter!!:) I just love all this characters, they are adorable!!^^ |