Erm... Well. It was okay. The description was just overwhelming, and I think that's the thing you're weakest at: Being too verbose. And just the set up of your words reminds me of old-time writing like J.R.R. Tolkien, which is what I really hate the most.
... I know I’ll never trust a single thing you say / You knew your lies would divide us but you lied anyway / And all the lies have got you floating up above us all / But what goes up has got to fall... ("Hit the Floor", Linkin Park)
'Slayer

I love the way you're able to describe the features the female, and the way you can express the main character's love for her. The way you describes scenes is breathtaking.
That being said, I think there is something as "Too much of a good thing". You're drowning the reader in descriptions. Additionally, you'll go into action scenes of swordplay, then stop for a good two paragraphs while you describe the main character's feeling for the moment. It makes for very staggered reading. You need to trust in your reader to image the scene for themselves, it isn't necessary to describe every detail. You're story reads much like poetry like others have said. But where exhaustive descriptions of emotions and symbolism make for great poetry, the same kills a story.

The imagery in this piece is astounding. I love the flow and rhythm that it has to it, very much like poetry. I really liked how you described her character (in the POV of the fey) in the first chapters; one of the best ways to character developement is by looking through the eyes of another character.
Anyways, I will be looking out for updates of this one.
Until Next Time
MidnightSorceress

Amazing...what a clever idea. You describe everything so beautifully in these two chapters- and your vocabulary is outstanding. I hope you continue writing this soon...great work.

wow. My mouth is still agape. This is the best description I have ever read. I made my whole family read this! Please add more! It would be a waste if such a writer as you stopped writing!

This is magnificent. You've taken an over-used idea and, through the use of detail and georgeous imagery, made it into a believable, realistic piece of writing. I love the way you convey her beauty so completely, but never once seek to draw attention to it with blatant descriptions of her being "breathtakingly beautiful" or other phrases like that. My favorite of the descriptions are found in this section: "He watched, silently, the gentle shadows of doubt and anger and anxiety as they passed over the elegant features of her face; watched the steady flicker of firelight on the hard curve of her collarbone, strands of her long hair tumbling unheeded over it." This conveys both her strength and her weakness; it shows that she is a human, although a very strong one. This reminds me very much of Anne Rice's descriptive style. If you haven't read any of her work, I would suggest it. Judging by your general style of writing, it seems like the kind of thing you would enjoy. So, in conclusion, you did a really good job on this piece. Thank you for taking the time and expending the effort to avoid falling back on cliches; many people could learn a lesson from you.

beautiful writing. Elegant and poetic