Wow...this is so moving...it's increadible, how much emotion you've managed to convey in so few words. I applaud-beautiful work

Very nice. So. . . depressing. But I like it [Dukky]

Very cool idea. I like the poems you had in there, and even though the story was ordinary, it was well written. Good job!

Thats really good. I liked the poetry better than the story though. But thats probably becuase sucicde is being used so much lately. The story was still well written. I like the "how can you define a child", its very true.

o my gosh thats sad.

Pretty good, a few grammar errors, but everyone makes them. Continue please.

Nice story and poem. I suppose this story has ended? keep up the good work =)