Wow nice imagery and i love how you describe the guys feelings. The velvet line is excellent as well as the show me the world... Well done. The layout is really cool also. Great poem

Oh, WOW!
That was incredible.
"Sticky, messy, yet engaging lust"
and
"To give you the last kiss against my will"
This is incredible. Did I say that already?
^_^ anywho, I love how you portrayed sex in the male's point of view. Well, not ONLY male - this can very much be just any person's sexual orientation and has that "hit it and quit it" mentallity, however, it was done damn well!
Velvet ... :: chuckle :: There's alot of smut that describes *that* place as one that feels like velvet.
You did it in the most classiest ways.
Love this ... will read more!

I loved that! I felt a few word choices were off, but on the whole, it was incredible. Flowed well, painted a nice picture *giggles*
Adored the last two lines. Actually how I tend to think about sex at times as well, though I'm a girl. . .*runs to put you on favorites and read more of your work*
-PN

I like it a lot ... it paints a seemingly accurate picture of the theme. I wouldn't know, though. I ain't a guy ... that last couplet is really good. And oh so true. Don't need to be a guy to know THAT one is pretty damn accurate.