Oh, don't stop here! This was really well written, you're a really good writer.

I like your story. It's sort of calm, but it holds great truth. I couldn't even find a spelling or grammer error...

I like Robyn, she reminds me of many people I know, I can understand why she would want that attention...

She's easy to relate to...

Keep writing!!

-Wow-

The truths in this story is immense. With the high price for security and everything. You've done a great job Jobey! It's written rich and enjoyable for an event that could happen just about any time. I can't wait to hear more from you.

I'd hate to not critique... but there really isn't anything I can say to my knowledge.

I love Robyn's character, she's so similar to millions of unheard people out there. You've developed her really well.

Keep it up.

O.o Certainly don't know what to say about this one. I liked it, that I'm sure of, and I thought it was nicely written. Very quiet, calmly, like a moment before thunder.

Tristan was an interesting character; one that I could probably read about all day, if it were possible. ^-^

Great, great stuff.