Ish okay. It needs a bit of improvement, some of them don't really work.

But then again i'm not that good with poetry

I 4got to ask u before, where's ur Chibi Cloud? Wat, he doesn't like poetry? Newayz, nice poem. Real funni in the beginning. (up my butt) Again, the lines sometimes suddenly gets short, so the feel didn't seem right. Everything else, nice jop.