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| Soul's Eclipse 2007-12-04 ch 1, | abuseI hear you. This poem, surprisingly, reveals my own feelings towards my parents. I like it, and empathize. |
| Rayfield Noland 2005-11-24 ch 1, | abuseYou, my friend, are good...i'd bet there are thousands of people who can read your poem without a title and know exactly what it's about and totally relate to it. I'm looking forward to your next post. |
| WinterFlame21 2005-04-29 ch 1, | abuseThe poem is good i know how u feel u have no idea how much. Hope everythin works out in the end anyhow maybe u'll get to move away thats my hope anyway |
| DaDel Amor 2005-03-25 ch 1, | abuseEmotionally Driven Poem. I like it, it's very nice. I can relate to what your saying, except it came from my own father, and now from people who don't have any business sticking their nose into what they don't understand. |
| Faded Soulfire 2005-01-18 ch 1, | abuseGod, do you know how much I can relate to this poem. It's almost like i'm looking at a mirror, dealing with the same things. My step dad has never appreciated me at all during the time he dated and then married my mom, which was a little over a year ago. I'm treated horribly- he comes home drunk and says all these horrible things to me. And the worst part about the 'you don't hear me' part of the poem is that it's true for me. No matter what I say to that man- he either ignores me or twists it to make it look like it's all my fault. I hate that. My step dad thinks i'm lazy, rude, have an attitude, and that i'm inconsiderate. He just doesn't understand, and it's horrible. Too bad he'll never understand at this rate. Step parents can sometimes be the worst people in the world. I feel the pain and the emotion in this poem. It's so real and depressing. I liked it though. The style and the way that you made your point clear. Good job on that! Faded Soulfire |
| lifescrewsusall 2004-08-30 ch 1, | abuseExtremely well written. Flows so naturally and incredible descriptiveness. Keep it up! |
| SaintEm0 2004-05-09 ch 1, | abuseI am so sorry that your step father talks down on you and treats you like you aren't his -step- daughter and liek some sort of...unruly teen. but hang in there. |
| mrs.shigwa.cobain 2004-03-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseNicely done. The repetition makes it all that more better. I have a friend that seems to be in that situation. Her stepfather gets into a rage and complains about her, even after the argument has been over for a half hour. He doesn't even mind if her friends are over. (It was scary!) So I can imagine how you feel sort of. Your description helped, anyway. Though, in some places it rhymes and others it only kind of rhymes or just doesn't. I think that with a poem like this, it doesn't need to rhyme, because it has its own rhythm, and again, the repetition that holds it all together. |
| Katterree Fengari 2003-10-13 ch 1, | abuselovely repition, and kew forboding ending... |
| ShadowChii 2003-08-13 ch 1, | abuseGood poem. I'm sorry your stepdad's that way-it just downright sucks to be put down "behind your back", even though you can hear it too. You have an excellent talent for writing. Great job. |
| Misguided Child 2003-07-27 ch 1, | abusethis is good, i love it, going on my ffavs list |
| Gigglinpunksmurf 2003-06-13 ch 1, anon. | abusethis is awesome! it describes me... lol but you know that... wow. um, yeah keep on writing. gigglinpunksmurf |
| Just Another Face 2003-06-08 ch 1, | abuseI like the way this poem works...If that makes sense...lol...I like the part "And i dont want to hear you anymore" Great job... ~Lyndz~ |
| Cry Tears of Darkness 2003-06-07 ch 1, | abuseits a very well written poem, has so much meaning and is very good. its amazing! i hope you can get these problems with him resolved bc you shouldnt have to live like that. either way, amazing poem, its very deep and powerful :) |