I like Arthur a lot better because he seems friendlier and more genuine. Are you going to hook Cora up with Arthur? Jane and Wilfred are allowed to stay together-they're both insanely sweet, but I like Cora and Arthur and Everett better because they have more punch to them.

Very nice chapter. Who would have thought Jane was a make-out artist, behind all her timidity? And Wilfred is the classic portrayal of the poetic, romantic hero. Only one thing. . .at one point you talk about Wilfred's mother smoothing the 'plaits' of her dress, when I think it should really be 'pleats', because plaits is another word for braids.

Dun Dun Dun! Who do you think this is again? Reviewing your story has become one of the top priorities on my to-do list. Doesn’t that make you feel special? Way to go fictionpress buddy/ traveling buddy! I’m going to keep reviewing till you get sick of me…Muahahaha. I’m just kidding. Keep pluggin away! You should be outlawed Outlaw! Yeah MKJ! (hope you caught that the first time) L8er pal! BTW, the brother sister thing is really sweet, and it’s not a lame ending.

Hello again to my favorite traveling buddy of all times! *big grin* I love your story. The characters are so unique. You’ve got mundo talent, my friend. *two thumbs up* I'm not sure which character I like the most as of now, because they all contribute in their own way to the plot. Although I admire Cora’s defense of her sister, and the way Sadie jokes with her siblings. You're such a good writer! The only problem with your story is that it has no major problems. I liked the way you described each place, it really added color and brought the scene to life! Can't wait for the next part!* stands up and cheers* And yes, I am a very morbid person. Just kidding *winks*. Normally I’m hippy-skippy, but I like writing strange fics. Now what does that tell you about me? Anyway, I’m so proud of you! You used a vocab word from English class! But to get back on track, I can’t even begin to tell you how much I like Gibson Girl. Catch you later Traveling buddy! Until next time. Hurry up and update would ya?

Hey!
I love your story! The plot's kinda interesting, and so are the characters. Hurry up and review for mine, or I'll flame your story! Just kidding. C-ya at school! You should know who this is...

WOW! I definately skipped the first half of this chapter! Sheesh. Okay, I like Everett MUCH more now. I like him as much as, if not more than Arthur. I think Everett is the fuller character and that he seems much more inviting now. I love his opening mini scene (which I missed). I can help but go back to cartoon movies (a huge obession) but he reminds me a bit of Dimitri in Anastasia - ethusastic, lively, bold, a bit of friendly brashness to him (is brashness a word?), he is business oriented and energetic. He seems like the person who floats about with different women and it will take him someone with as much intelligence, fiery passion for life and witty charm as he has. Total change in my review I know (as I also know I am cheating but I couldn't help but correct myself!). Sorry for the mistake!

-Stasia

The Outlaw Strikes Again! Before I begin, thank you O so very much for the review. The helpful suggestions and corrections were splendid and much needed, if you noticed. Thank you as much for the comments and compliements - if you have noticed, I am better at coming up with characters, ideas and plot than I am at grammar and the actually art of writing well. For this reason, I am completely grateful for your "pinpointment" of my particular weaknesses in Chapter 3. I have written WAY to much about my own stuff rather than you so let me start over:

I'm glad I got to know Wilfred better -- I liked him from the start. He reminds me of Milo from Disney's Atlantis. To answer your character questions:
1. Do you like them?
I don't dislike them but I don't know them well enough to say I like them. I look forward to getting to know Arthur and Everett is interesting.
2. Do they annoy you?
Everett is less likeable -- to me -- than Arthur. He seems bitter. He is a good character in the since that he has a personality but if he exsisted, I don't know that I would be jumping up and down to meet him. But again, I don't dislike him.
3. Who do I like better?
Well, from the other answers it is quite obvious. I like Arthur more because he seems to have more punch to him, more spirit. He's a fuller character. Everett came off has a bit cool (cold is too strong, he wasn't mean) - a good contrast with Arthur's warmth. For the contrast, I congratulate you, purposeful or not. These review seems rather negative but I assure you, I fully enjoyed reading this chapter and the characters were all around pleasing. It was well written, one of your best in that category in fact -- although its so hard to choose.

I look forward to getting to know these characters and the rest better.

Thanks again for the reviews, like you I get way too excited. I need a gifted person like you to help me edited my mishmush. Keep writing. I can't believe you are only a freshman.

-Stasia, Always.

You updated!

I like Everett and Arthur. I'm more curious about the former; I think his role in this story is most promising.

But besides your characters, I must keep raving about your writing style. The passage you wrote about Wilfred entering the "Daily News" building struck some cords of jealousy within me! There's something in your writing that's very professional and otherwise publishable (that *is* a word, right?)... I haven't encountered anything quite like it at FictionPress.

Which explains my mindless raving. I'm just glad I found this story! I wish you'd update more, though!

Soiree! I love that word!
favorite character? Arthur, it's gotta be Arthur. Big and friendly like a bear, only with the sharpness of an eagle. *shrugs* or maybe not, but I like him anyway. ^__^ Can't wait for your next chapter!

~Lady E

Charming! Very very charming! And the last chapter was not at all lame, the ending or otherwise. What enchanting writing in this one!

"A few scraps of ancient teal paint were knocked from the door, and they drifted to the floor, where some rats would probably feast on them later."

This is perhaps my favorite sentence in this chapter!

Your new characters too are charming! Nettie suits me better, practical and dependable. But I really like them all!

great job,
Lady E

I like the new characters as I like all of your characters. But I have to say I enjoy Everett greatly. He seems to have this air of charm and mellowness. Ladies' man, huh? Perhaps it is his "Cuban treasures" doin' the work?

My dad was thinking of smuggled those "cuban treasures" out of Jamaica. He didn't though. (What do you think I'd tell you and have the cops on our back? My dad couldn't outrun the cops.)

But Arthur's pretty cool, too. He had the good idea to invite Jane and Cora to the soriee.

Thank you for the description of a "Gibson Girl". That's very interesting, you know. I wasn't expecting an old fashioned chick who 'submitted to the male race'. I rather thought it meant someone niave or girlish.

Update soon!

*Faery Tragedy

Wow, I just found you (and I did review your poem, which is pointing out the obvious. I will stop now), and already you're one of my favorite authors. I love how you researched the time period; it's brilliant. GREAT job, please update soon. ^_^

Very interesting story so far, keep up the good work.
luv Aims :)

I like the two new characters alot! Especially together! Well I liked the chapter!! Very nice! Update soon!
Liriel

Wonderful, wonderful beginning! You say this is your first original fiction? But, how is that to be, when you write so professionally? ^__^ No, I'm not joking. You have definite talent.

As for separating this into two chapters...I'm not sure the effect of this chapter would be so marvelous if you divided it into two. This, as one chapter, is a very good intro, and I don't suggest you change it too much. Just my opinion, if it's worth anything.

once again, OutlawEris, you've quite outdone yourself.

next chapter then,
~Lady E