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| Kirika Moonshadow 2003-07-09 ch 11, anon. | abusehey! that's a really good story! I think that if you wanted to continue it you could...the ending was kind of abrupt..it just went from his death to the celebration all at once. *shrug* just how I feel. Detailing the wedding might be a nice little sequel stroy as well. |
| Laralie 2003-06-11 ch 11,  | abuseAw so sweet...except for her father who I still hate...this was a good story. It had a good plot and was very romantic. I hope you continue to write stories. I will continue to read and review if you do, and hopefully you could read and review one of mine :). Good job with the fic! |
| Laralie 2003-06-11 ch 10, | abuseDUN DUN DUN...you are good at keeping your readers curious about what happens next. Keep updating! |
| Laralie 2003-06-11 ch 8, | abuseHey good chapter, very action packed. For some reason I am have trouble downloading chapter 9, it could by my computer and I wil check back later but maybe there was someone trouble with the uploading process you could check. |
| Laralie 2003-06-10 ch 7, | abuseLol, I never thought her grandfather was a bad guy! When I said "and her grandfather?" I was referring to the fact that he had been stabbed. I never thought he was bad. haha, well good chapter! |
| Laralie 2003-06-10 ch 6, | abuseOh how suspenseful! Ok so poor Karalae is not having a the best time of her life right now...so now Marco is a bad guy too? And her grandfather? I liked him so much. I hope Karalae is smart enough to get away and I hope Darien comes to her rescue! Update soon! |
| Laralie 2003-06-10 ch 5, | abuseMay I just say that her father is a (insert very bad word here) and that I find it so sad that anyone could treat their daughter like this. Karalae and Darien are so cute together and I hope this ending is just trying to throw us off. Keep writing, |
| Laralie 2003-06-09 ch 2, | abuseAw...Poor Karalae. I like this story a lot. Keep writing. Darien sounds like a sweet guy...I hope something happens between him and Karalae but I hope he isn't a jerk like her father was. |
| sparklingdiamond8723 2003-06-09 ch 1, | abuseVery intersting-I like the gypsy idea! |
| Laralie 2003-06-09 ch 1, | abuseI like it so far. It's a good beginning. Where exaclty is it set and during what time period? I was just wondering. Keep writing. |
| pneumothorax 2003-06-09 ch 1, | abusenice start :) keep it going, nothing much needs changing: just nice the way it is. Cali. |