if you like the skyline you should hear about the new 2010, no, not 2009, 2010, ITS AMAZING. :D!!

Wow, 20 grand at one go? No kidding. Good story you've got, and I'd like to see what becomes of Connor, his racing career and all. But you could, you know, try to break the story into paragraphs and use the paragraphs to accentuate meanings etc. Laila's cute, too. I hope you update! And I love Skylines!

The Nissan Skyline! The dream car- the holy grail of race cars. *whistles*. You should maybe go into a little description about how the car looks, but as I said in the last review, most people who read "race war" type stories will know, comme moi. This is good. A little more physical character description might help too. Without those sort of breaks, dialogue can feel a little empty. And you're dialogue is good- just know to work on that. Well, to save some space on your review page for other people I will stop my rant here, by telling you that generally, you're a pretty good writer. Keep that up and you better post more!-Yin

Good- take away the little ending thing. I know from experience some people don't review or they give sappy sweet "Great job" reviews- but it doesn't really help too much. Now. Back to the actual story. This is good. Don't feel you need to describe the speed's they are at so much, because the reader can come to the conclusion that they're at least doing a seven second mile, if it's a good car. I know this kinda stuff, I'm an automobile buff. Focus more on the other actions- like the shifting and the drifting. Again, split the story into paragraphs. Some of the action that went on in this chapter wasn't described well, which threw my concentration. Kinda thing all writers have to work on, including myself, so don't feel bad. And this review is to help, not to bash- that's they're intended purpose. Other than that, good work- the story and creativity are the main things that matter but in the mean time you need to get the packaging straight. Even if I named every single error, creativity wouldn't be one of them cuz you gotta have that to be a writer- and it does help to fix errors, and they do matter. So...moving on to the next chapter...-Yin

This is good. Needs to be space out, but not too many other errors. Much enjoyed, elsewise. Your dialogue's not half bad either. *keeps going*-Yin

Cool. Seriously. I like this. I posted something like this- but these are characters, so let me move on to actual story...-Yin

ayy! whats up! I am righting a street story too i need a proffessional opinion on it.this sounds like a good story that i could sink my teeth into.so please review my story kinda like a you scratch my back i scratch yours. and if you do read my story please excuse the grammer errors im only 13.

njracer8 19 skyline is off the hook

The Skyline is special, huh? Heh, wonder where this will lead...

This fic is really cool. I just saw 2fast2furious a little while ago and this takes it to the next level. Please keep going with this story. And if you have time r+r my fic, Thanks

The Slayer Of Souls Has Spoken/

Aw, how shweet (I meant that for the end of this chapter, lol)... Anywho, nice. I can't really say much now cuz I don't know much on cars, but I CAN imagine a Celica speeding down a road, lol.

Loved the husband-wife interaction--cute, that it is. Ah yes, nice way of putting a beginning--already 'revved' up for some action. (Sry for corny line there, lol).

Woo Street Racing rocks. I've never done it tho but I usually go watch them :) Anyways...hurry! I wanna read!

Whoakay, you got me interested. Can't wait for the research to be done...and to see this 'prototype chapter'. XD