wow, this is pretty cool...though, where's the rest? can't wait to hear what happens...lol

NO NO NO!you cant just stop there! plz plz update!...kool story by the way

This story was awesome! I loved it and I liked how the main character seemed to be talking to the audience. It was a nice bit of humor. I suppose it's too much to hope for a new chapter but I'm hoping! ^^

It's a very interesting premise, owever i think that your timing adn description leaves a little to be desired.

This is a little fast-moving, but as I far as I an see, it seems it's going to be more focused about all of the problems poor Jesse has to go through because of is relationship, not the actual relationship. -Oops . . .Sorry, I was blabbing. This is pretty cool, and I love your characters!

Bit of a cliff-hanger going on there hmm?! Please update really soon!

please continue!! it was really good!
don't stop!

I'm not particularly clear on why precisely, having a mate would stop the slayers from hunting down Jesse and killing him. It would seem like the slayers wouldn't want the species to continue and would be happier if the vampires didn't have mates.

I really like Jesse's blunt tone throughout the narative. In particular, I love the attitude in the last line of the second paragraph, but you misspelled dining. That typo just jumped out at me because the line was so good otherwise. In general, be careful not to overuse the word hey.

no, I like him and alex...let them live! :) Ah, slash. ::happy sigh:: happy ending happy ending happy ending...
Update soon@!
NayNymic

I love your writing style! It gives me the shivers all over my body! Very well done!! I like it a lot!

ah... I love it. You're writing style is very addictive! Write more! I order thee! ... or .. something... ^_^;

O I like so far. Are you gonna update this story??

~B~

oh mi gawd! lol. this is really good. update soon please! pretty please! got to go. BYE-BYE!!

no second chapter evil!