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| philipa1234 2006-07-01 ch 2,  | abusereally well written i luv this story very well detailed |
| Kristina 2005-11-13 ch 14, anon. | abuseNOO! Keep going wiht this! I want to see where this is going, its so interesting! |
| babee - - balla 2005-05-30 ch 14, | abuseomg omg omg omg omg! y the hell u leave us a cliffy? update soon! |
| Krysten 2004-06-13 ch 14, anon. | abuseOh my god, this story is amazeing!write more and email me when its posted!thanks!!keep up the good work!! |
| xxFallen-Innocencexx 2004-04-14 ch 14, | abuseO.O That was brilliant and really touching. |
| Ashes of Marie 2004-01-17 ch 14, | abuseGreat story though some of it is rather choppy and unbelieveable. |
| chocolatecreme06 2003-12-24 ch 14, | abuse~Sniffles~ how sad! I can’t believe that sorry SOB kyle. Why would he come out of the middle of nowhere now and ask for his son back! Just as things were going right and she had gotten off of the streets and found jimmy!….i mean kyle may be his biological father but he sure aint’ no dad! I am on the edge of my seat now wondering what’s going to happen here. Please update soon! Lol ~Chocolatecreme06 |
| Transparent Cherub 2003-12-21 ch 1, | abusevery good start on this, although i think you should elaborate on certain events and characters and give more detail about them. the story seems to be moving a little too quickly. but i can't wait to see where this is going. ~jestacy |
| Kithic 2003-11-21 ch 14, | abuseAmazing, please continue! |
| My Works 87 2003-07-17 ch 10, | abuseI'm so glad that she has Jimmy because he's wonderful. Its nice to see her moving on from her old life to a better new one |
| Seremela Minyatur 2003-07-16 ch 9, | abusegood chapters! im glad that sh has jimmy, hes good 4 her. hey, why dont u check out some of my stories if yur interested lol? |
| quietdrama22 2003-07-15 ch 10, | abuseAs usual, I like the chapter's I've read. And its cool that Jimmy asked Kirsten and Jimmy to move in with him : > ) because he really loves her. But, I think that Kirsten should inform the police or some other athourity about Greg, I mean I doubt its normal for a mothers boyfriend to be that abusive and try to kill the family. Anyways, keep writing, you have talent |
| Beau Coeur 2003-07-15 ch 10, | abuseAW This chapter was so incredibly sweet! Jason's such a cutie, I can practically see this adorable little boy wanting a daddy. This was such a sweet chapter, and I sense some foreshadowing in the fact that as her surroundings get better, she's going to get worse in her guilt? Great chapter, Beau Coeur |
| Beau Coeur 2003-07-15 ch 9, | abuseHey! This chapter was slightly confusing, but I was expecting that because you warned me. At the end of the chapter, though, she explained it mostly so it's all good. Great chapters so far! I can tell that her family being abused is probably going to be the way she gets in contact with them. Very good idea. There were quite a few grammer errors in this that were distracting. You should consider doing a spell check, and making sure you stay in the same tense. But other than that, this was really good! Rock On, Beau Coeur |
| My Works 87 2003-07-11 ch 9, | abuseOhh, this is a good story. All the feelings seem so real. I can't wait for you to update, and the chapter lengths don't bother me at all. It's your writing style! Well I'll be checking back so keep writing... |