Wow. I really like your word diction in this. You're great at mixing in up in your dialogue too. I like it. Update soon ok?Rayne XOXO

Very well written. Interesting. I like it a great deal :)

I am very intrigued by the main character and the world you have created. It will be interesting to see where you will take us readers... will it be a journey of discovery? Or a trip into hell itself? Keep up the great work!