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| Flower-in-the-Night 2005-10-10 ch 5,  | abusegud fic so far. keep up the gud work. still i dont understand why u posted chapter 4 twice! must hav bin a aciddent. |
| Nothingmuch 2005-02-19 ch 5, anon. | abuseDid you know that you put chapter 4 in twice? |
| Crazy Biene 2005-02-05 ch 5, | abuseIm 14 too!! Yeah!! This is awesome work! update... |
| becofriz 2003-11-16 ch 1, | abuseomg r u gunna update ever? it was really good! much read more! |
| Icarus-Rising 2003-10-13 ch 1, | abuselike the thoughts of Demons in the chapter, (red eyes *shivver*) Keep this one going! ~MATRIX~ |
| Irish Whisper 2003-10-13 ch 3, | abuseI like this story so far. Lacks a little plot, and the chapters are a good length if it is a diary entry. Confusing at some points, Good characters, but may want to add a little definition to them while you write more chapters. Speaking of chapters, the last two re repeated... Luck 2 u-Irish |
| SoulessFreedom 2003-10-13 ch 4, | abuseThis is a captivating story so far but I must admit I am a little lost on many of the subjects. Her parents were never really introduced so the massicure/murder was not all that earth shattering. Make the chapters LONG. if you don't want to then make little dates at the begining of every entry so that you can UPDATE more and all that joy. -Souless |
| KoRn 2003-10-13 ch 5, anon. | abuseGa! the last two chapters are the same... lol... I LOVE THIS STORY SO FAR! Make the chapters a bit longer UPDATE! The murder thing happened REALLY fast but it added to the story. you need to get a plot going soon, it may help draw readers in. And if it is a journal, try making little dates and stuff at the top of every chapter/section. Update Asap. -KoRn |
| Snow Tears 2003-10-10 ch 5, | abuseUpdate soon! great story! |
| Anahiata 2003-08-25 ch 4, | abuseLOL! I love your story, but u've accidentally posted up the same chappie twice. The story is great and i'm absolutely looking forward to reading more of it. If u don't mind doing me a favour, read my story "Shadows from the Past". |
| Bekll 2003-07-01 ch 4, | abuseAs I read this story I felt comfortable because it is raining outside right now where I am, and it's 2 in the morning. This story is really getting good. I like the way that it is first person. Also, I'm reviewing because you said, while reviewing 'Distubed' by She Who Dances with Demons (she has a weird name, huh?) that only one person has reviewed. So I decided to come by here and check it out. I am SO glad I did because this story is really good and I hope you continue with it! (Chapter 5 is repeating ch. 4) |
| NeWriter 2003-06-12 ch 1, | abuseI think it´s good. You could extend your vocabulary a bit more and make it longer; explaning what she feels and how she got the diary or something! |