My Lord, her dad's mean!! Is he even human?? I liked the new developments. Hope you post more soon.

Good God but her dad is a horrible person! :-( Poor Krysten! I'm glad that Cadi came to her senses.

I liked the new characters in this chapter! Jager is very cool. The end of this chapter is very suspenseful. Good work!

Very interesting. Write more soon! (sorry, I'm being lazy with this review) :)

her dad's mean! anywayz, very nice, definitely getting more interesting. UPDATE! SOON!

cool! well written, especially the ending. got me hooked!

That chapter was very well-written, particularly the dream sequence. It was suspenseful and sad. And her dad is a butthole! (Sorry, just had to say it!)

Wow--her dad is such an anus... This story just keeps getting better and better!! ^_^

I have only started reading fiction on this site but I am quickly becoming a fan of Mr Vincent's work. With engrossing characters and lush envoirments, it is easy to get wrapped up in his writings. The only thing I am disappointed in is the lack of chapters so far. I cant wait to read more. Which I see as a good sign. Hats off to you so far. (and good job on "The Militia" story as well.)

Aha! An evil meglomaniac lurks in the wings...that adds a whole new twist! :-) I really like Krysten. She's not your typical heroine...she has issues! This is very intriguing and I hope you update soon.

It's getting good!

very interesting... please update soon ^^

This is a very promising beginning. I hope you post more soon.

This is a great beginning. Interesting main character and story concept. Hope you write more soon.