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| VinylButterfly 2003-09-16 ch 1, | hey man this was totally rockin so so so so good ur not the only 1 that feels this way flip :P |
| teresa7 2003-07-08 ch 1, | this could be a song you know...loved it ~teresa~ |
| AnnaSun 2003-06-30 ch 1, | Hi, Great poem! Thanks |
| Toadster 2003-06-20 ch 1, | my God, what the hell is your problem? think about it, do "they" really care about you now that they will care to miss you later? is it not possible that everyone is wondering the same thing: "will they miss me?" strive not to be missed, my child, because otherwise you are only a slave. forever a slave to this depressing thought "will they miss me". who the ** gives a ** about you? everyone is thinking the same as you are, "will they miss me?" I'll tell you because you are at the brink of understanding. Life is a full circle, and you will NOT be missed. what emotion your loved ones feel will pass. they will die and be missed and they will all die in the end, to be unmissed and unthinkingly replaced. strive to be forgotten, so they won't desecrate your memory by missing you so thoroughly that they forget you. |
| InkedinSin 2003-06-19 ch 1, | simply love the 1st stanza, Nice read. |
| not sure yet 2003-06-16 ch 1, | o, i love this! you cannot say my crap is good after this, the flow seriously kicks ** in this one and i love the first and third stanzas, seriously, awesome ** here, just ** amazing...am i not suppose to be cursing? o well, ive had a ** day, ill do what i want, ANYWAYZ, back to the poem,favorite lines, "Purple mountain majesty/Just another American tragedy" "Is everyone so paranoid that they can't tell me what went wrong" and well, all of them are really, seriously good stuff here, and im just rambling now, hate that, anywayz, excellent job |
| Needa S 2003-06-16 ch 1, | I think this would make an awesome song.. I love the depth you created in this piece..Excellent! Keep writing.. |