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Reviews For: That One Day

A-wolf-called-Skya 2003-10-15 ch 1,	hey! thanx for reviewing, and i thought i saw your nicky somewhere...your Fantwriter, right? at WS? cool! didn't think someone else would review so fast! lol. any way, i'll get down to saying what could improve. 1. like me, you could have a bit more discription, and maybe slow down a tinge... although, you could convert that error by make it the girltelling what happened to her in the past, then introduce the readers to the present...stops i don't think i'm making any sense. that was all, thou, other wise it sounds like i could be a good story! anyway, now i'm going to go into chit chat. yea, i no how many spelling errors i made in my chaps,just i'm too LAZY to do them ^_^ as always! i haven't trully fixed every error in Call to The Sky, but i am rewriting it, thou its going to be a long process before i post the redone book... I'm in the mood just to write about Fiona at the moment, not BS (blacksun) cuz he's just met a sorceress and feels very dumb in human form with a mini horn on his forehead from his eforts to shape change back to what he's supposed to be...a uni! oh well. ttyl! i g2r! -Rachel/Ari Every legend leaves a mark
Angela the raTTymOOse 2003-06-18 ch 1,	Um it's a cool story! I like that little fairy dude...Um...when u write more of it, tell me! :)
Elizabeth Wallace 2003-06-17 ch 1,	It's a very interesting idea. I'd like to see where you go with it. Check your paragraph structure. Something that always helps me is reading my writing aloud for errors. Things seem to pop at you a lot quicker that way. Thanks for the story, I'll be looking for updates. EW
Just a Random Reader 2003-06-16 ch 1,	thats pretty good..keep righting i want to read more...oh and theres one little mistake i caught "Somewhat like the kind you hear in fairy tails." is supposed to be fairy tales. oh well keep writing.

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