I like this, it's just a little shorter than some of your others and not quite as poignant. Interesting...but I'd extend/expand it a little more. It ends kind of abruptly.

oh thass so sweet.
Ill check out ur others now.

Amen. Such a short poem, with such a strong meaning. Such a simple poem, with such a complex/powerful foundation. It rocked my world.

hey that was a good poem. you are a good writer maybe one of my favorites. if u want you should read some of my poems and review them to let me know if u like or hate them ( and or what u like or hate about them) i suggest ("time", "life(or a small part of it)", "you f* c* and girl1/girl2) thanx