|Reviews for Spontaneity|
| g0shawk 11/15/07 . chapter 7
ahahaha! LOL :D awesome!
| g0shawk 11/15/07 . chapter 5
aw I like how he defended Damar :) Great chapter, as usual!
| g0shawk 11/15/07 . chapter 4
ROTFL! :D Did I mention how much I LOVE this?
| g0shawk 11/15/07 . chapter 3
*squee!* SO CUTE! XD
| g0shawk 11/15/07 . chapter 2
LOL! XD AW! Wonderful! :) (cracks me up every time you write 'Devil Spawn')
| g0shawk 11/15/07 . chapter 1
oh. my. gosh. this is amazing! I LOVE it! :)
| Freak-of-Spade 11/3/07 . chapter 1
I just want to say this to you: i believe you are possessed by chicken. NoONE in their right mind could right such an AWESOMLY SUPER MEGA BRILLIANT story. It's the chicken i tell you!
This HAS got to be the brilliantest story i've ever read on internet. I will give a huge, long big review about what i thought of your (brilliantissimoly awesome) characters, but i got to be quick. i think i'll die if i don't read the next chapter extremely very soon.
Biggy fat juicy review coming up when i'll enxt be able to sit at the dman computer without beign kicked off by my accursed family...coz you DESERVE the world's biggest, longest, beautifullest review...I gotta go.
.But damn is Edan the gorgeousest, wonderfullest and brillaintesquest character in the damn? DAMN RIGHT!
| merrymowmow 10/20/07 . chapter 24
I was wondering when you're going to update?
| scentedkisses 10/14/07 . chapter 24
i love it! lol i love the way you have created the characters and i absolutely love the way Edan..a thinks/speaks/attacks :P while reading i seem to always have a smile on my face and my family has been giving me some rather odd looks each time i giggle at the computer screen :D
thank-you for sharing!
lots of wombats, taffy and spoons
| foxy501 10/8/07 . chapter 24
by far one of the most hilarious i have read :) i like how edan is getting a bit more mature as well; it evens out his character a bit! can't wait for the big confession, lol- great story!
| Shiyuri 9/15/07 . chapter 24
Lilias, your story is really weird. '_' It gives me mixed feelings, like this:
First, I was amused at how childish and spoiled Edan was. Yep, he was annoying at times, but that was cutely annoying. Certainly entertaining in his own way, which explained Royce's attraction to him. The humor was kinda exaggerated and not really funny, but it got better.
Then, around chapter 11 or something, the effects wore off. I found Edan down right annoying. He was too spoiled, helpless, paranoid, unreasonable, ridiculously childish, thoughtless, and too innocent to the extent that it seemed like he was feigning it. I mean, he was sixteen for God's sake, not a hopeless 5-year-old boy. I was amazed at Royce's and Damar's patience. They were saints, really. If it were me, by that time, I'd be exasperated already. Nonetheless, I continued to read the story, wanting to know what was gonna happen next. Uh, the humor was defintely getting better; I chuckled quite a few times. I thought, this could be great if Edan's too-whimsical character could be toned down to a more reasonable level.
Then again, it seemed like Edan got better for real (around chapter 22), and he was just way cool, considering how he had been behaving, in chapter 23 and 24. I must say he was surprisingly wise when he argued with Cyrus that Royce needed to be hurt, not pampered. (err, look who's talking) The spoiled brat suddenly became so straightforward, strong, wise, and quite admirable in his agressive way of solving the problem. So much that it somehow seemed... unnatural, you know. He was not like this and he didn't show any hints that he'd be like this when the time came. *shrugs* Well, I think I like this little prince again. The ending of chapter 24 was priceless. I had to laugh out loud LOL.
In the process of reading, I kinda skipped over Zephyr/Damar's and Brelen's parts. Just read enough to know what was going on. I dunno if it was only me or not, but I focused more on Royce/Edan. Others were irrelevant. '_'
All in all, this is a fantastic piece of work. I once attempted to remove this story from my fav list, feeling irritated at Edan's irrational actions. But now I'll definitely keep it. You're getting better at dialogues, be them outer or inner. I hope you'd update soon. ) Thank you for writing this and reading my blabbing.
| Shiyuri 9/15/07 . chapter 7
You know what, the last line in this chapter is the best line so far. Line of the week, actually. Now on to more important stuff.
OMGOMGOMGOMG... . . *hops* True, the story is cliche, but it's well-written and well put, so it's different. Edan, well, let's just say that he's such a character. Sometimes he IS really annoying and ridiculously childish for a sixteen-year-old boy, (maybe you overdid it a little, you know) but I can't deny that he's kinda cute, refreshing, and enlightening. Royce is, hm, cliche I guess? But he's not boring and plain, I assure you. Damar is confusing. So he loves his prince? As in *love* love? Is he really immune to Edan's terrible temper, or is he not? Plus, I think it's not really smart to introduce Edan as princess of Niall. There's no princess in Niall, surely everyone knows how many people there are in a royal house. Even if Royce doesn't, he might send someone to Niall to inform that the kingdom's princess is currently staying in his castle. That's courtesy, isn't it?
Anyway, this story is still amazing! I'm hooked! Thanks for writing, honestly. ) This made my day.
| WickedRedHead 9/12/07 . chapter 24
This story is awesome! I love it! Please update soon.
| Brittany 9/11/07 . chapter 24
I love you! This story is the awesomest story ever! It's glorious! I'm not sure I can tell you how great it is. But I love it and you and...and... You're awesome! XD Thank you for writing it! I look forward to your next chapter!
| iwishillwilluponyou 9/3/07 . chapter 24
*gigglefit* i love this story :D