Hello. I'm going to start with some cc for this. I'm assuming that this is a finished story, since it hasn't been updated in awhile, but I always re-edit my finished stuff so I'll make some comments on this:

"How Metropolis was build in 300 days."

"Build" should be "built"

"written by a nazi and filmed by a liberal."

I'm pretty sure that Nazi should be capitalized.

"'you're auditioning for a roll"

roll should be role.

that's it for nitpicky grammar. Stylistically, I liked your voice. Tim seems like the "normal guy" which is cool to read about. Also, the way you tell the story is interesting enough to make it in the pov of a "normal guy", and not some over the top gary-stu.

I have an opinion about a few of the paragraphs here, but I'm not sure if it applies. THis is the first chapter; I may not have a complete feel for how you are telling this story. So if some of this stuff doesn't make sense, disregard it. With further reading on my part, I may need to take this back:

I think that starting off a story saying that you will start it off cliche only brings it to the reader's attention that it is an overused beginning. I guess if you 're going to do it that way, don't apologize for it and dont mention it being cliche.

Also, I'm a big fan of "showing" a story over time, so I would've been happier without the breif explanation of Metropolis, preferring to learn about it over time with small details here and there. But I suppose that telling it all at once is easy, and I don't blame you for doing it. I probably would have done the same.

Like I said before, feel free to ignore these two paragraphs if the things taht I mentioned fit the rhythm of your story.

So...yeah. This was a reveiw loaded with some cc, but overall I really like the beginning. Take it as a compliment that I wanted to go that in-depth with your story- becuase it really engaged me. The first and last reviews that I give to a story are usually the longest anyway, so rest assured I won't bore you with my endless comments for the rest of it (unless you want them, of course!)

When I have time, I will be back to read the other chapters.

Until then, have fun writing!

Oh! I finally finished it! I've been reading a chater at a time for ages now, and I have to say; this is brilliant.! It's so original.

this is such a cool story u are so talented and i hope u get famous when u do we can be famous 2gether Caz

I am even more in love with this story now! I'm going to read the rest of it, but I've got a spelling/grammar thingy from the last chapter that i meant to tell you about (by the time I've reached the end and have given you a prooper review you'll be wanting to kill me!)

at the start of the audition you said, "my souls squeaking..." soul is you know, human heavenly blah blah, but sole is for shoes...

I'm liking this so far, but before I go onto the next chapter just wanted to say that you said "you're auditioning for a roll..." roll is as in the pastry, but role is as in a part in a film...

Oh, a kitty! Sorry, I'm an annoying cat person that goes nuts when cats appear in stories and go goofy things (most of the time, normal things cats do). Well, it took me about three weeks (sounds about right), but I've managed to read every chapter of your series. I love every one of them. I enjoy your story because it's one of the most original stories I've seen on Fictionpress. My favorite character right now is Isaac because he's always doing something funny. Anyway, I suppose you have a lot of ground left to cover, don't you? Your story is on my favorites list (the only non-manga on the list right now) so I'll be on the lookout for future installments of Tim's chronicles in the movie business.

Okay, the lesbian jokes were a bit childish, but I couldn't help but funny anyway. Anyway, ouch for Tim for getting shot down by the bar maid. I suppose it could've been worse.

Whoa, lots of stuff happened here. I was blown away with Tim's phone call to Newton and I loved the scene with Tim and the make up artist. Issac's still funny as usual. Well, I'm two chapters away to catching up. I'll probably get to them in the next couple of days.

Woot. I've been waiting for this for a long while, and it isn't as bad as you think it is.

Okay, a lot of stuff happened here. I was shocked alongside Tim to discover he's going to work with the guy who stole his ex-girlfriend. It's a good thing Jenner left because Tim doesn't need to deal with two people he loathed at the same time. I thought Issac was hilarious on the plane ride to New Zealand (I fell out of my chair laughing once). I feel those were the best two parts of the episode. Well, that's all for this review.

Yes, I am pleased that Jenner's gone. I've met people like him in my life that act like him. I wanted Tim to have the main role (mostly because I wanted to watch him struggle with losing weight). Ah, well. Isaac will work just as well. I'm glad Tim stood up to himself against Jenner. Nice to know the man has guts. I also found myself laughing at that flipping the bird joke. At this point, I wanted to point out that you suffer from the same grammar mistakes as I do in my writing. I mean, I see about one or two spelling mistakes or misplaced words in each chapter. It hasn't distrupted the flow of the story, but I felt I should point them out anyway.

I consider this the best chapter yet. Had me laughing a few times.

So the butterflies finally decided to attack Tim. I wonder if he'll feel any better as time goes on.

I certainly like how the characters have different personalities from one another.

another worthy chapter, though, I have nothing to comment about.