i like the repitition at the end and the way the language slightly switches from more refined into casual. good.

I liked your poem very much; it flowed well. Unlike many non-rhyming pieces, particularly ones classified as "angst", it escaped the woe-is-me, platitude-ridden, trap and became a really wonderful poem. My favorite line: "Balanced dished now topple/
Crashing to the cutting room floor" While there are a few typos, this is an overall great poem.