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Reviews For: Gray Skinned

faery tragedy 2007-10-24 ch 1,	abuseVery chilling and impressive. The one-line syntax works really well in your favor, and helps get the point across! Your anonymous narrator is easy to relate with...which is a bit chilling in itself. I've never struggled with weight problems personally, but her hopelessness--especially entering middle school--is such a widespread theme. It really hit home. I think you have a typo "I.I don't know" there but that's all I could nitpick. *faery tragedy
squiggle-line 2006-01-29 ch 1,	abuse"Kids don't try what I did at home." The amount of sarcasm in that one line is amazing and concludes the whole story very well. "My mother.the mother I.my mother..." Extra words? The airy but defiant tone works incredibly well. I like how you start in the present, give an explanation of the past, and then return to the present. It is amazing how you can convey so much emotion in one short sentence. ...Hope J.B.'s sister is doing better.
A Collection Of Essays 2005-10-07 ch 1,	abuseThat was so...sad and heartwrenching and beautiful and believeable and...okay Grem, deep breaths...No, but really, I love how you wrote it. The style is terrifyingly perfect and I always wished I could get this style down but I've never been able to. So, yeah, great little one-shot.-Grem-
citrus scented 2005-10-04 ch 1,	abuseoh this is a very thoughtprovoking story. really sad, i like the way its written- in the present lookibg back,. bit depressing, but very moving. i love the title- it fits it well, wonderful.
insertterriblypoeticlineher... 2005-06-26 ch 1,	abuseA chilling story, and it progresses well for how short it is. I like how she describes the beginning as a 'diet,' when she starts to cut out meals, how it never seems like it'll end up how it did. It shows definate empathy for the character. Good work, and thanks for the review. =)
brittanga 2004-03-19 ch 1,	abuseUm... Sixty isn't possible. I know because I had anorexia in eighth grade... I still have weight problems, but they're minimal. They threatened to hospitalize me at eighty. I'd have been dead before seventy, and I was short. But still, good story. Being that way is so scary, because you can't eat 'cuz you'll get 'fat', but you know if you don't you're going to die...
Hexic 2003-11-22 ch 1,	abusewhoa... tht's sad. very touching.
~E~ 2003-07-19 ch 1, anon.	abuseThat was a very good story, and I hope J.B.'s sister gets better.
Lavender Knight 2003-07-14 ch 1,	abuseHow could you possibly only have gotten one review for this?! It's too excellent...it's short and gets to the point, but it still leaves you feeling like you had been reading for a long while. It was truly tragical, but I am sure millions of girls worldwide go through that phase where they "munch-a-bunch-lose-your-lunch" routine or just skip meals. This was so real and a great warning for readers out there, but one thing is your summary, try using a sentence from the story, a really good one that will draw a browser in by curiosity, this is really worth so many peoples time. I loved it in fact I'm going to put it on favourites just so people will see it! Cheers!!
i lost my name 2003-06-18 ch 1,	abuseaww ... that was really sad. well written. good job.

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