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| HeatherLee 2008-01-23 ch 10,   | alright, well it doesnt look like you have updated this in a while, so i can only assume you abandoned this story?? anyway i liked the story itself a lot. i have a few plot problems though: i think that the two of them fell in love to quickly and too easily. chapter they are both figthing it and the next, they're over it. there was no transition period. also when they were in canada and then when they were in italy, you threw out WAY too many names for me to keep track of who was who and what was going on. none of it made sense so i only assumed it didnt matter because i couldnt understand it. hopefully if you go back to this story you could fix those little plot holes. besides that, like i said, i think this was a really good story. ~Heather |
| Static Wolf 2006-02-26 ch 10, | In this one allow Alana to meet Favret.. you can have them try to hurt each other or for an added twist you could make Favert fall in love with her. Or she could be captured and she can release some of his harem... or I don't know something... hehe ^_^~Static WolfP.S. Nowhere in these reviews am I condemning your work.. just giving you ideas so I can once again enjoy your delightful writing. |
| BeautifulSin 2006-01-21 ch 9, | This is so COOL!! I love this story! |
| Mae Liz 2005-10-30 ch 10, | That was really good. Ya know, I'm kinda looking forward to you updating all of these stories that you have up on here. That would be nice! Lol. Update Soon!(even if you consider it done) |
| Akina Cortessa 2004-05-31 ch 10, | This is the best story. But all of your stories are good. So please update soon. |
| ILUVCHOCOLATE 2004-05-19 ch 10, | excellent story! more pwease |
| Sh'arra Rie 2004-01-25 ch 10, | HAY!! You havent updated in 5 months!! UPDATE! NOW |
| Icefire2 2003-10-29 ch 10, | Very good, I like this story, realyl like Alana's attidude. |
| sweetchick14 2003-10-18 ch 10, | WOW! I love this story! Its awesome! Keep up the great work! Plz update soon! |
| Amie Black 2003-10-02 ch 10, | More, please? It is REALLY good! |
| megan 2003-09-29 ch 10, | that is one of the best stories i have read on this web site. please, please!keep going with it. |
| FidesSeveri 2003-08-16 ch 10, | Updates are always nice. |
| nina-101 2003-08-15 ch 10, | Great story update soon:) |
| babygirl 2003-08-15 ch 10, | More please. |
| RikaTabithaStarr 2003-08-15 ch 10, | as usual good chapter, update soon |