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| TiEka Koniku 2004-01-28 ch 1, | abusewow. now that creates a kik @$$ vision! hehe. well done. i like your writing a lot. now if only i was good at haikus.. -=sigh=- *TI* |
| Anagronax 2003-08-09 ch 1, | abuseNow that's a great way of looking at rivers! Why haven't I thought of that? (Probably because I'm too busy scaring the bejeesus out of people...) |
| This Account Is Closed 2003-07-19 ch 1, | abuseQuestion: Is it supposed to be 'meandering necklaces OR pearl', as you've got it, or did you mean 'meandering necklaces OF pearl'? The only problem is that this is not a haiku. Unless they've redefined haiku poetry since I was in school, haiku has a very strict format of 17 syllables, constructed in lines of 5-7-5. It's a grand poem--beautiful imagery, which from what I have read, is your strongest point, but it is not a haiku. |
| PurpleLilac 2003-07-05 ch 1, | abuseI'm speechless...u never told me! |
| Ellerfru 2003-06-24 ch 1, | abuseHm... Usually Haiku are supposed to have the syllable pattern 5-7-5, but I guess there are enough people who have already told you, so just ignore this... Anyway, this is a wonderful description. NEVER STOP WRITING! |
| swift sky silver 2003-06-23 ch 1, | abusethis was awesome.=0) |
| Wasted Postage 2003-06-22 ch 1, | abuseWonderful job! Especially for a first haiku! Excellent work! PS. Thank you for the reviews. They were very much appreciated! |
| Keep it 100 2003-06-20 ch 1, | abuseWow! I've never seen it described that way before. Great work. ~Heart of the Sword |