lol, sorry, but I found that highly amuseing. I just heard the real verson of that this year in school, and my teacher was a ** about it, this versons much nicer ^^

*giggle* Oh, it was funny to see how you chose to interpret that myth. Very good. However, you forgot to add the part where he turns into a flower after he dies! That could be worked in somehow, couldn't it?

I'd love to see this expanded a little. You could make it longer more well-developed, if you wanted to spend the time on it. Even if you want to keep it as it is, it's very good and very creative. More people need to write based on mythology. Keep up the good work. :)

Nice update of a good story. The ending was good.