It's interesting...I was kind of confused after reading the first two chapters, but, then I understood, a little, after reading the A/N's at the bottom as well. Ya, well, good job. ^.^

Very interesting story! I'm glad she got away from the crew but were her rlatives really that bad. She only met them once.
Typing error in the 2nd sentence: "assulted by nose...
and to many "drop" words. Use your thaursaus (or however you spell it:)
Will there be more chapters? I hope so!

Oh my, Mum says. Where did this come from? Are you ok? As your breathing hastened so did mine and I felt my self raising from the back of my chair in response. This is too scary! :) Good job Baby!

Wow! At first I didn't think I liked it but it certainly is haunting. I liked the two versions - I thought it was a mistake but it works. Will there be more?