before i read, i jsut want to say yay! u updated!

Not bad. We know some of the suspects ahead of time. Perhaps, Tanaya wants to be in the investigation because she doesn't want to appear to be a suspect, but she is already on Dwayne's list. Dwayne should probably be a little suspicious about her being so eager to call the case "ours." There are some grammar mistakes here and there. Be careful about those.

You're really good at writing mystery stories. I have no idea who the killer is yet, and I'll bet I won't know until the very end. So keep writing, the suspense is killing me. :)

this is a great story! It is very original which is a relief for the reader. I like that you have the different elements in the story, mystery, romance, adventure, ect. Update soon for me!

Dwayne leaves so abruptly. I suppose he doesn't handle death that well. I'm saying that he's looking at it so objectively, even though he apologies later. So, there's been a murder. The way Dwayne questions is typically how a police would do it. They typically interrupt within the first eight seconds (obscure facts r' me). Learning more about Tanaya helps build up her character a bit more. Tanaya is feeling more than she lets on about the girl's death...

I take it that the suspect list will start soon.

good job! next chapter coming soon? get to it! thanks hehe...

Very interesting chapter. I'm glad you explored a bit more of the characters from the last chapter. Ali and her friends remind me of those girls from the movie Heathers. Very annoying, but I guess that's how they are supposed to be. The ending sort of leaves open a brewing mystery. Dwayne proves to be very observant, which is good considering his role in the story. I feel bad for Tanaya because of Ali and her little friends. There were some grammatical errors, but nothing too major.

Very interesting thus far. I love a good mystery. He is going to find a mystery, right? Anyway, here's a summary for you:

"Dwayne Kenni is an amateur teenage detective who finds himself in a new city without much to do. Or are things not what they seem?"

I think that the town or city you're describing in chapter two sounds like one of those little sleepy towns where it appears that everything is calm and boring, but things aren't really like that. Well, it's not a great summary, but's the feel I'm getting off the story thus far.