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| shas-sairi 2004-07-27 ch 1,  | abuseMista Mugs, if you can't be nice, please keep your trap shut! She is trying okay? Sap(lolz) Your story is good and i like it. (you should have let me edit before **pokes** HINT!) Oh and the ^ it is a waste of a review just to do what he did. :P |
| puuuurfect angel 2004-07-15 ch 1, | abuseI think that it is worth it to carry on this story. But maybe it would also be worth it to leave your character... not fat but not super skinny either... you know what I mean? Just a little over normal maybe. I'm suggesting this because all the stories I've been reading recently are about very short very skinny girls and I think it's about time for a change. Would you like to be that change? Anyways, as I said I think that you ought to carry on this story and don't mind about the grammar, there are people out there with almost no comprehension of what the word grammar means. But don't forget that stories are written in the past tenses and not the present ones. Good luck! ^^ P.S. Thanks for reviewing my story too! |
| matt15086 2003-07-08 ch 1, | abuseGreat story! I was wondering if you can review my story called Earth is under attack. THe chapters are not in order but it does have a prologue.THanks! Bye |
| BCRGAL 2003-06-24 ch 1, | abuseWell, here is a good review for you. I think it is very admirable for you to write about what can be such a sensitive subject. The world can be cruel. Please don't let them put you down. You are a beautiful person, no matter what anyone says. Most of all, do this for yourself. That is what is most important. I wish you the best of luck, and I hope you will soon update this. Sarah |
| Mista Mugs 2003-06-24 ch 1, | abuseOK, first off, it's spelt "prolouge" not prolog. Just tought I'd get that off my chest. Second, you should try to develop you ideas better and give a clearer picture of what you are trying to get across. We all understand what the story is saying, it's just that it needs to be told in a more defined and descriptive way to more effectivily convey your message. And grammar is a useful tool to develop. I suggest that if you (as you say) suck at grammar, you spend some time honing your skills. I can detect potential in this story and I look forward to further installments. Cheers. |