This has a really good rhythm to it.. The way it flows is like a soldier marching to his death.. Wonderful way how you used the short sentences and rhyme to make the piece have a really good tempo..

eesh! war poems... i dunt like them... nice poem tho, it is. i just dunt like the topci...

Very powerful poem. The short sentences were very effective. War is a terrible thing the world was to suffer repeatedly. When will people learn? Good work, keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*

wow...wonderful poem! dark, but i like it. good job, great thoughts. keep on writing!

Love the rhyme here! Love this piece...war is an awful tpic. I think I like the screams of pain chanted in wain. WELL DONE!

~BYE~