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| Alba Deborah 2004-04-29 ch 1,   | most certainly NOT an iambic pentameter. you put in several trochees. literary freedom, right, but still, i wouldnt define it as an iambic pentameter with a patrician edge. i still like it, though. i think the rhyming scheme is interesting, though time and shine dont rhyme :D im like that, sorry if im insulting anyone. this is by no means meant to be a flame, just constructive criticism. i wouldnt bother if i thought this was just plain crap. :D so feel honoured. btw, i like the two last lines a lot |
| whatica 2003-10-18 ch 1, | this is really well written, i like it a lot. it seems like something i have written about a guy... in my short poetry collection called A collection of poems decicated to Brian check it out if you get a chance but anyways it seems so smooth and real and the part about the disguse is really neat as well |
| Romantic Squirrel 2003-09-21 ch 1, | good |
| Bleedingtree 2003-09-16 ch 1, | McD just wow. just absolutely amazing. i really do mean it. it's so good. it flows great, the rhyme is amazing. it's just absolutely great! well... i have to go and do STUPID homework... arg... then babysit... double arg... then pick out a formal dress for tomorrow in school... it's our homecoming week and tomorrow's formal day... well wish me luck... i don't know why but oh well... GREAT SONNET! Kim |
| Aimee Raven 2003-09-14 ch 1, | omg, that is so good, you can't imagine how much i liked this, it's i don't know, adorable? not really, it's wonderful, every emotional, beautiful, yet simple, you put the emotion through very well. love and good luck. Twilight |
| Tanika 2003-06-29 ch 1, | Wow. this is a great poem you know that. al of your poems are great. im sorry i didnt review it sooner... i hardly ever visit this website ne more. toad-frog was my muse but he doesnt post here ne more... so neither do i. great job. keep em coming.. and i hope this isnt about tht girl that hurt you... the one you couldnt get over then did then didnt again... cause that would suck... you should definetly get over her... shes making you see women in the wrong light... you got to find somebody who will change your mind about us |
| Fate Thirteen 2003-06-25 ch 1, | That was really beautiful. It feels strained, stressed - I suppose that's what She has done. It was stunning. I feel privileged. 13 |