this is good, but can you make it easier to see who's talking by deviding the things into paragraphs. use correct puncutation and capitalization, too. it always bugs me when ppl dont.

I luv it..keep writing so i can keep reading :)

It's good...but IT'S TOO SHORT!

You know, that was pure evil... I was getting into it and then, voila! That's it for the first part. Can't wait to read more (hopefully I'll read more soon =D)