Weird. Have you ever read the parody of The Raven with the computer (I don't remember what it's called). The last part reminds me of that. It's got a creepy vibe all the way through.

This was very interesting. And very original and meaningful. I liked the ending especially. Good work, keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*

LOL very nice! I liked the ending. The first part had me confused, though... although I felt that something really deep was flying right over my head, I couldn't understand, no matter how hard I tried... oh well. Maybe someone can... although now, when I look back at it, it all makes sense... well, in any event, nice work. You managed (as is your wont) to write something both well-phrased, beautifully symbolic, and incredibly deep. I already said this, I know, but I love the way you think. ^_^ Please keep writing!

Kept me holding my breath, it's very suspenseful! I like the ending ^-^

i ADORE the end! perfectly ended. the poem had a good rhythm and a good flow to it. its words are "deeper" than mine normally are, but mine are normally fluffy and light :) i liked