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| me 2006-08-12 ch 1,  | ? |
| atreyu love 2006-08-11 ch 3,  | oi, her dads a bit.. mean ^^;; |
| J.X rosethorn 2006-08-10 ch 1, | nice |
| HungarianPotatoFarmer 2006-08-02 ch 9, | It's really good! I like it a lot. I like the ending...and that part where Michael and Nicole gave her "advice" for the honeymoon...hilarious. That would be so embarassing. Hahaha. Anyways, just wanted to say that this is really good, and I'll probably read the next one real soon. Sincerely, H.P. Farmer |
| atreyu love 2006-06-10 ch 8, | ♥ im gonna go read the sequel now! ^^ |
| Whispery 2006-02-02 ch 12, | Hm...I read the whole story it was okay...But the epilog was really sappy...But it was ok. Good job. |
| Shadow of the Black Wolf 2005-08-25 ch 12, | I like your story. Very original I'd say. Please e-mail me if you make other ones. Shadow |
| classical 2005-06-01 ch 11, | I don't get it, why are there only three paragraphs or so in this chapter? It makes the book really hard to read because I keep losing my place. |
| Anon 2005-03-18 ch 11, | I liked your story. There were a few grammer errors but nothing huge. The only question that I had was how was her child still alive since Chris stabbed her through the stomach where the womb and child is located. That would have had to do some major damage...but that was pretty much it.Thanks for an enjoyable story.Anon |
| MoonAngel 2004-09-07 ch 12, | that was really good! i liked it a lot! |
| inupuffball999 2004-08-27 ch 12, | YYAY!You write the best stories..too bad I can't get author alert...You woulfd definitly be the first on it! ^ ^I'll look for your other stories to read. |
| Icyglaze 2004-08-01 ch 4, | Awesome summary with the limited characters you get for the one or two sentences. That really grabbed my attention. However, the story got a little messy and I felt lost and everything was moving too fast. There is no real description of characters and there are too many explanations. Try working your explanations into the story itself. You switch between third person and first person, fix it. The POV isn't needed since your story is in third person. If you want to add the POV, then keep the story in first person. It is not the character's point of view if it is not in first person. |
| mangagirl234 2004-07-21 ch 9, | I just finished this chapter, and I think it's really good! I knew she was going to become pregnant! I think that's so cool! |
| mangagirl234 2004-07-21 ch 1, | I haven't read the story yet, but the summary sounds good! lol! I just wanted to tell ya that. Vampires rock! |
| ItalianQT 2004-04-03 ch 12, | I thought your story was really interesting and i can't wait to read the sequel! : ) |