goodness... the power of this poem hit me like a mental two by four. it's infused with sadness, but also with truth, experience, and frustration. simply wonderful!

Wow. that really struck me, especially the line "Fire at will!" It caught me completely off-guard.

You have a very clever way with words.

thanks,
Lady E

Wow... truth to it's very angsty core! Well done

This is, sadly, very true. But still masterfully written! Fantastic work! Oh! Keep writing, and posting!

~*~AbunaiChikara

im feelin this one..
ive been there, but then again, haven't we all?

great job..

jace

The only question I have at the end of the poem is why the speaker has such fear. But, honestly, the whole thing was so original, and I thought the last stanza was appropriate beyond limits. So good job.

What a concept, of kicking someone when they're down. Except, you said it far more eloquently.

The opening line just set the stage. It's completely obvious that you write from personal experience. You have such a passion when you write. It's just incredible... stupendous poem. I loved it.