Except for one line, I didn't get the impression that she died because people were mean to her, or rather, not kind, I guess...though wouldn't that just make her hate people, instead of being suicidal?
The idea I got from the poem was more like 'look, a dead person.' Albeit a beautifully described dead person, true.
There are some places I could argue with about(yes, like I'm here for anything else) for example "The story ending like her hair, with one last drip -" I'm not fimilar with hair ending with a drip. I'll assume u mean a drip of blood, but would that end the hair...? Or did you mean the ends of her hair?
Also- "she wouldn't be riding on the dead river Styx" ...can a river be dead?

You're really a great poet. Yes, it is all angsty and unhappy, but it's good. Write more!

hmm...wow...verry creapy, and dark, and otherwise. . . ok, so so i suck at reviews, but that's not the point. verry verry good poem. and yes, i know verry is spelled wrong, but since it's one of your pet peaves, i'm just doing it to ** you off. anyways, i agree with megan. if it was in a book, i would buy it, depending on how much it is. youu know, because i'm cheap. anyways, i loved the whole strawberry wheat thing because your all like great, it's going to be about someone who likes strawberrys and wheat, but no, it's a girl who killed herself, and has wheat colored hair with blood on it. so, again, great story.

i must say you've become even creepier than our dear friend kirstin. i am, ah, very very impressed. my compliments on the crane part, of course now i can only see that part in little women where the one chick died and there's now a little bloody crane floating about. but thats not the point. well what is my point thats the question. ok hows this if i found it in a bookstore i would buy it but no i am not going to pay you. ok

Wow . . . nice and depressing, good job. Uh, yeah . . . Anyway . . . nice repetition, it adds to it.

Truly brilliant. I love that line 'strawberry wheat stained red' for some reaosn. I just think it a very powerful image.

*stares* Very powerful..emotional...wonderful... :) Keep at it! Will be waiting for more!

R/R my work if you want, nothing but drama filled angst...stuff poetry...

Nightmareslost

I really like this poem. It is dreary and deoressing, just like me! LOL. Not really. It is an awesome poem, though. If you want you can read some of mine. They're decent. Anyway - keep writing.