YE, quite an exciting story! I can't wait for the next chapter!
I did read to chapter 4, but I'm reviewing on 3 because I've got a small editing comment here;
"under the new surname Lily" Surname means last name, not first.
That's all. This is great. I'll be waiting eagerly for the nxt chapter!
~Squidlers

wow, trix. this one's a beauty, i realy like it. a lot. please write more. kudos.

Wow! That was bloody brilliant. (No, I'm not British) But really, that was some amazing peice of writing. I love the description and the dialogue, the main character is just great (Great personality; strong, independent type) and the the sense of realism in the future is accomplished in a superb fashion.
Granted I've only read one chapter,I can't wait to read the others! Great Work!

Great! But.. why didn't seamus just tell her he knew her parents and spent a while tracking her down?

=Any way the wind blows=

great job keep writing

Wow! I don't know what to say other then that I agree with the other two reviewers. This is a great story with a great plot forming. There were very few mistakes and the ones that were there weren't a big deal.

*Claps hands with much enthusiasm* This chapter was much improved from your last one. For one, the usual edginess is back and once again there is a switch of perspective as you shifted from the head of Ryn to Seamus, which I must commend you for doing so seamlessly. Next there is the issue of the plot line, which is the most important part of a fic, is going along very well, and I have yet to find a place within the piece where I must stop my reading and go back in my head to make sure that what you're writing actually makes sense. Furthermore, you've brought in a wonderful element of danger that people, such as myself, do enjoy so much. Please DO keep the chapters coming!

Halo-dreams seems as they would be a bit frightning, but to the hordes of sex-starved and hormone driven of the future, they would probably seem like a paradise. Ryn's back to her old flavor, once again keeping me reading. Seamus seems like he'll be a good match for Ryn mentally, but not physically, not yet anyway. He's gotta be pretty smooth however to get Ryn to "trust" him. This chapter blows chapter 3 out of the water.

A had a strong feeling that he would find her. If he had followed her that easily before, it wouldn't have been a chore to follow her again, now would it? I found Ryn to be missing her edge this chapter, that part of her mind that spoke harshly of her clients and people she interacted with, pointing out flaws and how she could take advantage of them. This chapter definitely showed the vunerable side of Ryn, in that she actually became scared when she heard Seamus' voice again. Also... what are "halo-dreams?" They were left undescribed.

Overall, this chapter was not bad, though to an extent it was missing the usual flare and edge that the other chapters had. The chapter also used terminology, ex. "halo-dream places", that you did not explain. However, that happens in almost everything that I read at one point or another, so it's not a huge issue, but in a science fiction story it can become an annoyance or possibly a hindrance if the term becomes more important in the course of the story. Still, this chapter is not a failure by any stretch of the imagination. The plot line is still forming in a clear, coherent, and logical manner and going along at a reasonable pace so that the story does keep moving without skipping those vital and interesting details that make a piece stand out. The grammar is good (bad grammar is one of the few things that I cannot stand in writing, especially that of narratives)and the choices of words that you use has originality and a unique flavor. As usual, I think that you did a good job, and I continue to eagerly await future installments.

So now we have somebody hunting for Ryn. I like your description techniques, you described Seamus' looks, along with his personality, which is something that doesn't happen very often when you really think about it. The only thing I found odd however, is that in the middle of writing a chapter for my own story, yours happened to have a character named "Ryn," a very main character. My story features a woman named Ryn, as more of a side character, but she is main, and named Ryn nonetheless. The only thing different their descriptions as well as that your Ryn's full name is "Saryn" whilst mine is just named "Ryn." Kinda creepy, but anyway, looking forward to chapter 3.

Hmm...what is there to say about this? In short, I like it. In long, it's a good piece that took the premise of the cliche assassin and cloak and dagger kind of story and remixed it with a futuristic, sci-fi twist that is refreshing to read. Chapters tend to not be too long(which is a plus in this case) and developement of characters is well done, though the plot does not seemed hindered at all by this. Also, there is a slight bit of foreshadowing, though the mystery is still kept and thus, room for plot twists remains to keep readers, like myself, on their toes. There are a few minor mistakes within the story, however, the mistakes are not large enough to actually take away from it. I plan to keep reading this fic, so please DO keep the chapters coming.

Now that was sweet. I thought this would be one of those run of the mill kinda stories you see everyday and ignore, but this went in depth, it had thorough description and even talked about why clients happened to do what they did. I hope there's another chapter on the way.