good poem! i like it :) thunder and lighting are so beautiful... it was written well, but i feel as if the ending was a little... shaky? anyway, good job!

man, this is awesome. It really seems as if you were really lightning, talking about your feelings.

Arayuldawen

So true...and strangely enough, the perfect murderer can also heal uncurable afflictions. Lightning is incredible, the power it has. Very good poem.

... *blinks* I'm sorry... It's a bad day for me now, I'll read it again sometime...

From this, I would say you are good at this. It flows pretty well.

that is a really cool poem I can feel like that sometimes especially at my younger brother...

continue that awesome writing!

Only a handful can do something like this.

Heart of the Sword

SCAREY! But really good!

OOh. Interesting perspective there! I like. Good job with the rhyming; it flows pretty well most of the time, notably this verse, which I really liked:

"This happens

When I'm in anger and rage

There's no escaping me

The world is your cage"

Some verses need a bit of tweaking, as they don't flow quite as well as the rest, but overall, it's a great poem. Good job!

man, there was lightin' over the weekend when i was swimming! or was it thunder...?

This was very, very good! I never thought of lightning like that before but I like the idea!

Great style and imagery. it captured lightning perfectly. keep writing!

very kool and interesting, love the imagery, muchly enjoyed, excellent job