A very vivid piece.

You use the word rocks twice in the first four lines.

I like the imagery of 'captive sand' and 'stealing stones.'

A few too many 'ings' in my opinion but I suppose as the tense it can't really be helped that they exist.

The imagery of 'Waiting to drown sun's fire in liquid night' is ... o *shivers* beautiful, beautiful.

Always,KMJ

I really like this poem. It's full of great comparisons and rich text. By far one of your best.

wow, quite an image! loved the cold vs. hot theme. certainly a very vivid piece. liked it muchly!