:) I like the last line in this. Only one problem that I saw. In their house when everything was all on the floor and all messed up. You said they were knocked out and then in the next sentence you said they blacked out. You should take out one of those. Other than that, good.
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Cool... I like this so far. It's kind of quick in some places, and there are a few spelling mistakes, but other than that it's cool. Oh, another thing, you should describe your characters more. It's hard to get a picture of what the characters are doing without a description, but if you describe them people can imagine what the characters are doing and stuff... Just a suggestion... Post more soon.
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~ionlyliveindreams