Usually in return for a character wanting something they always have to give something back. *shrugs* I don't know why the book I read do it that way. It's okay that you didn't update in three months, a lot of people don't update till later. Update soon!

Great chapter! But watch out for some punctuation. Hmm, the Shadow is an interesting thing especially if people perish for the certain things that happen to them. Update soon!

Well, the actions of Matt are a bit off to me but heh. . . just ignore that. Nicely done and update soon

Awesome story ! Great cliff hanger too...I'm waiting for the next chapter !

Hmm, I don't know if people these days will admit to themselves that they're in love with somebody so quickly *shrugs* doesn't matter. I didn't think that you had to tell us that Matt was being controlled because Tarren thought that. O, a cliffhanger, nice one! Update soon!

ooh...cliffhanger...update soon, this is really good!

and the plot thickens...^_^

the thing with the "I" again, but other than that great.

I hate to sound like an English teacher or something, but for this part

"She gripped onto the rope and descended, much more carefully than Matt I might add, down the cliff."

you really shouldn't say "I", because up until then you don't have a narrator, and you shouldn't just start to have one right there. You could just say "She gripped onto the rope and descended, more carefully than Matt, down the cliff."

I think the story is really good, though.

It's a good chapter though I still feel that you need to describe the character's emotions and a little more of what's happening even the slightest movement because it was a bit puzzling when Reiko was talking to Tarren (I assumed that she was sitting up or something like that) to make sure if he was all right then the next she's already asleep, you could say that Tarren saw Reiko moved to lie down in the corner of his eye or something. Update soon!

This is a nice chapter and the first, I have to mention, that doesn't end with their day finished and them going to sleep. I would avoid the words 'really' and 'sort of' while describing something unless it's a person talking and describing them. Try to describe the people they bump into on their way such as their hair and color of their eyes and maybe their expression because if you want, it adds suspicion to a character. Update soon!

This is a pretty neat story! And I hope more suspicion will come up soon. Update soon!

Hey everyone! It's Blue Yukiko :) I just wanted to say that I know that there is another story called Four words, and that D. Destiny has given me permission 2 use the title, just in case there any copyright mix-up. So, I hope you enjoy the story!