I loved those chapters. I tend to like animal stories, but some just bore me. But don't worry bout that. Yours did not bore me. The action never seems to stop. Once you think that the chapter was about to end, something happens. I like that in a story.
I also liked how you used a different narrator for each chapter. It makes me see the veiw points of each dog. Just keep up the good work. I'll be interested if you ever update this.

OH! LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT!! I'll give a more detailed review later, but right now I have to think about it-will Zack and Richard work something out so Callie and Skip can see each other often? Also, may I suggest a couple new characters if (Ooh, I hope I hope!!) and when you do make more chapters?? If you don't mind me doing so, I'll suggest them in my other review when I do get around to that.
I felt so special that you mentioned me! I saw "My thanks to Bijou ham-ham-" and almost had a heart attack, I was like, "Wait, I know that name-OH!! I FEEL SO SPECIAL! IT'S BIJOU HAM-HAM, MY PEN NAME!! AW!!

Nice chapter - keep it up!
Interesting that there's a new narrator-- reminds me of Animorphs.
I think Faisal is a cool charecter. I also liked Fern, and the new side we saw of Dallas.
VERY nice use of canine body language, mannerisms, and such. (The reuinion between Callie and Skip really stood out, although partly that was because it felt so intamate-- even if you were mostly just using normal dog greetings...)
Great fight scene, as always. And quite interesting how you showed that just because someone's aggressive, doesn't mean they're heartless...
Very Bittersweet ending. Definitly makes me want more. (Also interesting how you showed the plight of pets, not having control of one's destiny...)
Nice poem at the end, too.
As for problems, the only thing of note is that some of the early dialog sounds a little artificial. (I also had a hard time keeping track of the Doom Pack, but that might have been because I was reading too fast...)

Woah! AMAZING story! More, more, more! You are an awesome writer!

I LOVE this story. Write another chapter! It is FABULOUS!

Urm... you need to run this through a spell-check, then re-upload it... I'd put my vote in for chapter 2, as well, but I know you have other stories to write...

This is good! Hee hee, you should, A. Write a sequal, or B. Write another chapter. Btw...how can you make the italic/underline/bold, etc. show when you upload it? I'm always having trouble with that...